P1 Family is more important than friends because family is more loyal than friends. Also, you will always know your family better than you will know your friends because you know more about them as you live with them. To elaborate on this your parents will know what emotion you are feeling This means they can make you feel better.”
P2 Friends can become more distant over years but family will always stay the same You will always consider family to be a priority in your life but friends will have different people become a bigger priority in their lives over time. For example, my friend Jakob was once my best friend but when Clive came along I was no longer able to play with them.
P3 Your family created you, so why would you choose friends over family? Family may not be as fun but your family protects you with their lives no matter the cost. Who would you expect to repeatedly go out of there way to help you in times of need, friends or family obviously you would expect your family to always be there to help you
Conclusion
I hope you all agree with me now that family is better than friends.
Hi Jason,I liked how you had lots of ideas that family is more important than friends and how you asked "I hope you all agree with me now that family is better than friends" I do agree that family is more important than friends.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Zoey's comment and want to add that you did really well by using advanced vocabulary like 'priority', 'elaborate', and 'emotion'. Doing this helped make your persuasive writing sound more effective and your ideas seemed carefully thought out. You also used some other persuasive language techniques like asking rhetorical questions, and strong verbs or adverbs - Well done!
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